A Review


Charles from Charles Reads did a review of my book. Love. Find the review here http://charlesreads.com/2015/04/16/love-by-jin-okubo/

And please check out his other reviews because he has some awesome romance stuff.

Screw it I finished it: Game of Thrones final review


wpid-wp-1426675681462.jpgThe dread of having to wade through the last 200 pages of Game of Thrones in two more sittings really did not sit right on me. So I took it at one go and read it. What follows is my opinion of the whole book and why I do not like it. For all the sensitive spoiler freaks out there, do not worry there will be no spoilers. Just my thoughts on the writing, the story, and why I felt and feel the way I do.

No, I did not enter the book with a positive look. I did not even make it through the first episode on TV. And when I mean I did not make it through I mean I could not change the channel, website, video player fast enough. That is how much the dialog sucked in my opinion. I thought it was uninspired and still do. To me the discussions tend to be children playing at a mystery game where they all know that each other is lying but refuse to call them out on it just so they can play longer. There was no intrigue for me and even though I was wrong on my guesses for what was coming I found that I was right more often then wrong as when an event happened I was not surprised, nor was I amazed. To put it plain and simple the writing did not carry the weight that a good fantasy novel with intrigue should carry.
Maybe I am reading the book wrong, maybe it is not meant to be a fantasy, maybe it is supposed to be a soap opera told in a fantasy setting. If so, then it is clear why the book did not appeal to me. If he was trying to write a compelling fantasy novel I think he failed and the only reason the book has merit is because it is long. But a long boring story is still one thing. Boring.

Something that I did like was the description. He was very good at painting elaborate scenery and rooms. I could feel the cold of the ice around the neck, but that was not enough to save the story that had no excitement.

As I said before I could see what was coming and though I made mistakes here and there about what was happening it was not for lack of trying. I wanted to get  into the story and really tried to be excited.  Yet even when it came to deaths they sort of just happened. They tended to remind me of the old paint by numbers books but in conversation. So when someone died, even though I wanted the character to die or whether I wanted the character to live I was like well yeah that was going to happen. There was no loss or elation in the scene. This may be why the most common comment I have seen is I saw the show and then read the books. I guess for those who saw the show and enjoyed it then they would enjoy the books. It would be like reading a script and enjoying it. Well I did not.

My last comment will be on the ending. (Sigh) even my friend who lent me the book was like, wait until the end. Others were wait until the end it will be something. I can honestly say I waited and there was nothing. Now before the comments come as well they built it up to big, or you must read the next book, or even that I may have just missed the point, I simple say NO.

The Ending was just there. Even pyre scene was just there. And you could not expect me to be excited about something that anyone with any thought would know was coming since the first mention of it way way earlier, I am talking first part of the book early and then throughout the book. There was no mystery, no excitement, no suspense. Again it was paint box one red, box two blue.  If I put water in a tea pot and put it on the stove to heat up. When the pot whistles I get hot water. I am not surprised by the hot water, I know what happens when someone heats up water. IT GETS HOT.

For the childlike whiners out there. A spoiler may come after this, that is if you have not seen the show at all, or read the book in this wholeBookCoverImage time. Which is doubtful. But you have been warned. Do not worry I won’t go into specifics but just add a simple fix that to me would have added so much in the end.

Now someone might be  stupid enough, ignorant enough to make the comment, well what would you have done differently. Or to put it easily put up or shut up.

One simple fix. A very easy fix and it would have added some inkling of suspense, thrill, mystery, excitement. Remove three rocks from their earlier mention. Have them brought in as a funerary gift to be burned as offering to the gods. Have those rocks be noticed by Daenerys but only in passing glance. (Not the obsessive are they no they aren’t bullshit game that was used.) As a second thought she brings up the idea of what they are just as the screams and thundering is heard from the pyre. Then do the reveal.

The way that he did I would have been more surprised if they had been rocks. Or if he would have saved them until IMAG0135book two. At least that would have given me something to look forward to if that can be said about anything in this book. You know a mystery, some suspense, anything to bring to life a dead story, dead dialogue, dead characters with very little to know value to me. Even the imp towards the end was just there for me and I rather liked the imp towards the end, even though I saw him and still see him as more of a move the plot forward device.

By Jin Okubo  author of Love

http://www.amazon.com/Love-Jin-Okubo/dp/1495962717/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1429058956&sr=8-1&keywords=jin+okubo+love

Outrages


For a sight purportedly to help, promote, Indie Authors this is a despicable thing.  When clicking at their review section there was a nice red text stating Get A review. And there is the hook. But look at the price, and that is per review. I find this kind of work predatory to new authors, and while I have thought about buying reviews this here from a site that helps or writes work to promote indies you have to wonder just how honest they are, or better yet just how hypocritical they are not. I find them so sad.

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Inspired By OM


I see you there talking

you speak loud so all can hear

yet when it is my turn to speak

you quietly disappear

how dare you ignore me

how dare you shun me

how dare you use the words I write

you do this all in spite

in spite of the friendship that could be built

bury that knife of neglect to the hilt

my heart can take it

but soon enough another will read me, will share me

soon enough another will give me wind and you will see

that while you passed me over and did not share me

I was still able to be free

And at that time I will leave you

I tell you know so you will know

It was not for what I did not read but what you did not show

What it takes


In an attempt to not be the spam blogger but also find a balance with what I share the line has become very clear. So here I am sharing with you what it takes to get a rise out of me. What you need to have in order for me to like something, reblog something, comment on something.

Liking something.
I find it fun to like things. Even things that I know bother me but the fact that someone put it up and caused my brain to think about it, no matter how much I hate it or love it. I will like it. Posts that make me think are fun to run into. But that is as far as I will go. I will like it because it made me think.

Commenting on something

I comment on things when I feel strongly about the topic. When I want to bring attention to something or when I feel that there has been a violation. It does not matter to me that I may offend, insult, or basically make someone cry. I could care less. I am commenting my opinion and my thoughts from the research that I have done throughout my life. I do not apologize for what anyone else thinks about the words that I type. I work with words daily, in my writing, in my teaching, in my life. Which is why looking back through my posts I tell people to read, reread, and then read again to what I stated, as to often than not the misunderstanding is that the individual did not read or did not comprehend my words.  But back to the topic at hand. I comment on things that draw me in. And no, it does not have to be words. Pictures, video, heck even a good title has gotten me to read it and make a comment.

Reblogging

I reblog friends that talk to me. That means if we interact with comments the more that I will reblog you. I do not reblog everything as there would be not much time for my own posts to get noticed. I do reblog others more than some but this is due to the fact that some people post more blogs and make a larger signal. But still there must be that line of communication for me to reblog. If we have talked if we have even crossed paths on a post somewhere and started to follow the chances are I will reblog your stuff. Talking helps folks.

Do I expect you to reblog me. I would like it, to that extent I will not lie. But no it is not an expectation. Still the more I reblog someone I do hope they take notice of it and decide that some of my works deserve the notice to be reblogged, commented on and liked. On an interesting topic, my words are mine and if I insult you, treat you like crap, or all in all tell you to fuck off, it is not the responsibility of the post hoster, if I am doing a guest post, or mine. Should you know me then you would understand that I do not insult, treat people like crap, or tell people to fuck off unless they deserve it. And nothing is more deserving than talking BS, trying to tell me or anyone else to change the way they behave because it offends your sensibilities.
When it comes to comments on faith, spirituality, religious matters, I default to my atheistic position. Bring me proof, verifiable, falsifiable, and testable by anyone, anywhere in the world.

When it comes to science, medicine, engineering, theoretical or not, bring me recent published papers from peer reviewed magazines.

If it is just a discussion you want then that is fine. And the final note, just because I do not agree with you is not the reason that I may insult you. Agreement or disagreement on a topic is not enough. So think clearly and post clearly. It is the only way we can keep blogs from degrading to the twitter world where everyone just starts spamming and following for the simple fact of getting more views.

Getting followers is nice but if you have 10000 followers but only 10 views per day, then there is something wrong.

By, Jin OkuboBookCoverImage

Author of Love

Schedule Tweets


Hey all tell me what you think about the whole scheduled tweets like tweetdeck?
Do you think promoting through social sites like tweeter garner you more views or even sales?

As an Indie Author I am always thinking about what would get my name out more and would love to hear what you all think?

The Reviewer


Be warned this will be a rant.

There is nothing I hate more than a professional writer or editor coming along and stating that someone’s writing is just plain horrible. I feel that there are people out there who would like make every fantasy a knight and dragon one, every fiction a Grisham novel and every SF a star wars rip off.

I would and could excuse critiques on grammar, spelling and improper word use. For an Indie writer with no resources, writing after work, things do get missed. There are also times when we rush a project before we proof it completely. Yes these are signs that we are not professionals. These are also signs that we do not have extensive budgets for professional editors. But we make do. We the Indie writers go back and correct, re-write and keep our work on an improving slope.

Our writing is our passion and that can be seen on how we are willing to take our work which has been criticized and edit it again.  Even to the point of putting off our current story.

You may ask yourself well what does this have to do with anything. The point is clear and it happened to me as I am sure that it has happened to many of you.

Amber Light Story of Mark

My short teaser, character snapshot, was critiqued. And I pretty much agreed with the reviewer. I had rushed it and I admitted it. I took it down and fixed grammar and spelling. Then came review number two, clearly someone who was just trying to start something but still he gave me a clear good review though it was in spite of the other.

Marcus the person who reviewed my first work that I commented on to being correct and I apologized for the mess I had released the first time took the second review in stride. Yes he did not miss a beat in insulting me by claiming that it could be me who would dare to make another account on Amazon in order to post reviews. Though the insult did not stop there. The facts as Mr. Marcus pointed out that my work was just plain awful. The writing was terrible and that I would have to change my writing drastically before he would give me a thumbs up. Then in a glib last statement he quoted the point that my teaser was just four pages long knowing full well that it was an eleven page teaser.

I have since edited the work to make it more standard and re-worked the grammar and spelling. Though I refuse to put my writing back in the box. As I have stated countless times I am trying something new with the Amber Light series and I will not stop. I will improve the writing for there are some rules in composition that can not be ignored. But to revert back into a confined style, I think not.

As for this review and the reviewer Marcus. I gave him my pound of flesh as atonement. I conceded that the project of the teaser was rushed and have since fixed it. If he does not like the writing because it does not match any form he is used to reading or can not handle reading something in a new style. That fault lies in him. I am writing to challenge the reader into new territory. I am giving something new to experience and that is what Indie writers bring to the table. That is what Reviewers seem to forget. We are a new flavor and just as I got used to and even like the flavor of green tea ice-cream. I think readers will eventually be able to like the writing for what it is and review it as such. Though there will always be the pros out there, readers who are in fact editors and professional writers in real life ready to tear down a new form. To them I say have a coke and a smile and STFU.

All comments are welcomed but as you can see even I did not spell out bad words.
Addendum : After much consideration of a comment to this post. I found it to not really add to the work and was a stroke of my ego in order to allow a marketing link. While I have no problem in the way that people make money. I do have one where it would belittle the work I put in.